Hello, class. This is the story I want to share with you. Try to write your own amazing experience too. This is an example from my trip abroad.
Once I took an amazing trip. I went to Canada. I visited my brother Eduardo. First, he took me to the Niagara Falls one day. Then, we traveled by car to the Butterfly Conservatory in Niagara Falls. The whole experience was exciting. After that, we arrived to the Niagara Falls and I could take a lot of pictures in there. The water falls are breathtaking. Finally, we had lunch at a very nice restaurant. The food was delicious. I remember the hamburguers tasted like no other hamburguers I had tried before. This was a fascinating trip.
Once I went to Morelia I visited my cousins.First they took me to the zoo one day we saw many animals.Then for we were an experience unforgettable. After that we saw the animals dissected. Finally we left the zoo and returned to home. ALEJANDRO
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DeleteOnce I went to Morelia AND I visited my cousins. First, they took me to the zoo one day. We saw many animals. Then, we HAD an UNFORGETTABLE experience. After that, we saw the DISSECTED animals. Finally, we left the zoo and returned home. ALEJANDRO
MY BIRTHDAY
ReplyDeleteAt first in the mooring, my family and I went to fun and we went out to Lori mar pool when we got in the pool my cousin carried a volleyball ball to play in the pool after that we finished to play we sat to eat. Then went back to prepared my party in the afternoon there was much soda and much food too, in my party too much played with my cousins. Finally pass me the well in my party. A week later saw again to my cousins of the school.
JOSE ALCARAZ AVILES
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First, my family and I HAD fun and we went out to Lori pool. When we got in the pool, my cousin TOOK a volleyball ball to play in the pool. After that, we finished playING. We sat to eat. Then, WE went back HOME to prepared my party. In the afternoon, there was TOO much soda and TOO much food, too. In my party I played A LOT with my cousins. Finally, I HAD A GREAT DAY in my party. A week later, I saw my cousins AGAIN AT school.
JOSE ALCARAZ AVILES
My cousins and i went guanajuato at vacation was great, the days were very hot.
ReplyDeletewe played soccer in the park, We ate in the italian food was delicious. at the end We visited the mummies was interesting. finally We returned home. YURELI
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DeleteMy cousins and I went TO Guanajuato ON vacation. IT was great. The days were very hot. We played soccer in the park, We ate in AN Italian food. IT was delicious. At the end, we visited the mummies. IT was interesting. Finally, we returned home. YURELI
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I went to Janitzio. It was an amazing place.
First we got to the dock. Then we boarded a boat adn moved to the island.
Was very exciting!!!.
After that we got off the boat and walked in to the town.
We climbed the stairs, was very tired.
Finally we ate in a restaurant and shared good moments in family.
The food was very delicious.
Ilse Enid.
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DeleteFour months ago, I went to Janitzio. It was an amazing place.
First, we got to the dock. Then, we boarded a boat AND WENT to the island. IT was very exciting!!!.
After that, we got off the boat and walked into the town.
We climbed the stairs. IT was very tirING.
Finally, we ate in a restaurant and shared good FAMILY moments.
The food was very delicious.